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Originally Posted by Paradigm
A spiritual guide to the meek. Purgatory is psychosis in dreams.
surprise of defeat surmised in the speech.
A Charlatans Dichotomy - Sell you my soul & barter art & philosophy.
Hope & despair are commodities; The balance of heart & psychology.
Narcissistic Perspective - Self-reflection or... artistic expression?
The Synapse - Whiplash. Defeat & empathy. I can preach endlessly
31 candles on my 30th birthday, they no longer think less of me.
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I liked those lines, they were thought-provoking. The rhyme scheme at the end was meh, but overall good rhyming and wording.
You're a pretty smart dude, a lot of those concepts were complex/ very well done.
Got the impression you were trying way too hard to emulate Black, though. Even if you weren't doing it on purpose, if you read one of his drops next to this one it's ugh.
The repetition was badly done, and probably the biggest negative. Some concepts seemed a bit tryhard, it was like philosophical overload. I think you could have definitely toned down the abstraction. The imagery (chlorine, firewalk, the place references) felt very out of place.
Overall, it was like... cool, but why?