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Old 08-25-2014, 05:10 AM   #8
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You're one of my favorite writers on any site tbh. It's like these words always existed in the trunk of human experience and you carve them into this shape. That's the best way I can think to describe your style, very unique despite the frequent comparisons to others.

There are moments of tremendous insight and perspective - the systems you rend/meant to begin stands out. Blind to what the face of your father hid was great. The scars of life hidden in a man. Brilliant. I thought this was a fresh rumination on aging, and the end line couldn't have been better (though reminiscent of the Frozen song a bit). If anything, I'd like to see you focus your writing a bit more and ground yourself more singularly. These verses are great, but can leave some readers in the cold at the same time. Dope shit as usual.
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