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Old 08-24-2014, 08:59 PM   #6
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Vulgar:

Prentice's a tough customer, ain't it?
He cut up his mother in basements & now he wants ur ugliness tainted

LMAO. I like how you used the guy on the right's facial expression against Suth here. Paints a funny scenario in the heads of us readers. "Ugly" jokes can get old, but you did it nicely here.

if I let the banter rise, I might just trip and clip this pantomime
Suth's grill will need repairs that the R2D2's on his man's shirt simply can't provide

^ Very creative. At first, the line seemed like a plain bar based off of just one-dimensional observation, but anyone who is aware of Star Wars at all can see the complexity in this. Dope punch.

No golden tickets for this rematch...I pity this is it fam
You're both wearing corny shirts. At least he isn't wearin a Willy Wonka wrist band

^ Decent. That "golden ticket" connection gave this bar enough of an edge to remain relatively enjoyable. Nothing too hard-hitting, but it's okay.

It's obvious u attend nerd conventions, tellin your girl "let's text after"
if I threw a Pokeball at ur head, it'd bounce off with the subtext: "Dark Geodude deflects capture"

^ Lmfao. Funny.

Wow, look at all the flashing lights! The Crest White smile, I hope this is respect
naaa cuz u a Brooklyn vampire. U grew ya fingernail long enuff to poke em in the neck

^ LOL. Nice closer as well. Just some enjoyable shit.



Suth:

This pic is a blatant win. Total trash thas embraced in wind
Your pops got his hands on waist.. lookin 4 a dumpster 2 place it in

^ Ouch. That hits hard, lol. I wasn't feeling the "embraced in wind" rhyme, but other than that, you connected well. Took a nice observation and flipped it well.

Lookin like the past & future Vulgar. Pull out ya ruger, bitch..
Now do us the favor of killin yourself. Yea.. b on some Looper shit

^ Kind of played. I've seen the "Looper" concept get used many times...

1, 2, 3, 4, 5.. know what comes next? Well, guess it w.me
Continue 2 mock the count.. already got d 1's haircut from Sesame Street

^ Ok...

Face of a homeless Dracula w. no type of life highlight offers
This pic's d most sparklin move by a vampire.. muthafuck a Twilight Saga

^ Not really feeling this either. Isn't really saying much or impacting as hard as it could.

Ya fashion sense hasn't been fashion since alil after fight d power
& your high jeans isn't a Urkel issue.. Ya look dirty & in need of a shower

^ Lmao, nice closer. Could've connected better, but I like it.


Vote: Vulgar. Far more consistent and impacting.
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