[Adonis]

Seymour took a very vivid and descriptive route, filled with so much imagery you HAVE to read it multiple times to actually understand what was penned. butts essentially wrote the story of the trolley crashing and a the split seconds ensuing using a handful of personal accounts. The writing was done in a meticulous fashion. Each line was an image, each image held a flow, and each bar was seamless in the grand scheme. This style is actually best suited for the short verse topical tourney, me not knowing who you are, but with this verse I have a strong sense. Anyways, I really did like the verse, so much so that I can't give you a single thing that I did NOT like about it. RARE occurrence, good shit.

Slut wrote more of a traditional topical in my eyes, opting out of the visual verse, instead going with a rather opinionated verse. Saying the quake was man made for population control?? Not sure if that's where you were going, but that's where it took me. Anyways, the rhyme scheme was cool, and for the record, the scheme you went with is very hard to pull off because often times the writer throws in words to match the scheme rather then progress the story, but you did not. I liked the verse for what it was, had some knowledge and very solid writing. I don't really have any complaints other then you covered a few different fronts rather then keeping focused and covering more ground on one of the three topics you had here. With that said....


I am voting

SEYMOUR BUTTS

Butts kept focus and had the better writing, although Machine too had a very enjoyable verse, it was simply over matched.