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I dig it, trust me when I say this "We are trying."
Also, if you would be willing; Could you post the sources for your piece?
So, first off I enjoyed your piece. You appear well educated and not one of the youtube gangsters that seen a few videos about the Illuminati. The wording and flow was inciting on terms of "intelligent rap," so I could imagine there being more then a few haters out there. Nevertheless, it was informative and artistic; I do wish however you rhymed more frequently and picked a different topic.
(Everyone knows about the Illuminati, it's the most publicized secret organization on the planet which is controversial in it's own (must be real just off that logic.) So what im saying is "The banking system isn't what needs to be addressed if your gonna be on this topic, you should have mentioned the Bilderberg meeting's and the royal families; On top of Thule Society, Knights Templar and the Skull and Bones. Also you should have talked about Americas debt and what is happening too it etc.)
Sorry just some directions Id point on some low grounds.
Anyways, I enjoyed you piece but was a bit bored after the "In the beginning." I felt like you were preaching, and were a little too repetitive. Things that are both difficult on your topic of choosing.
Ink
Your poetry is enjoyable as always, deep meanings that keep the reader intrigued; I like the subject matter and ur ability to maintain a slipped boundary between abstract and contemporary. For me though, it's hard too pick up the climax, Ending and final meanings ya know? I mean, I got it but it's difficult. Your art is complex is what im sayin.
"He doesn't deserve the plight he's in, I watch him as he's wallowing
Devoid of sins and evil whims, but now he's Job with boils for skin"
Flow is dope topic is doper, game was dopest. Dope was doped I feel like dopamine good job.
V/Ink
Close one guys
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