Who've you defeated? Every HoF i've versed was beaten.
I'm God so don't Question who 'I Am, THAT I Am' is Alpha Omega, heathen
Lol, decent opener. Like the swag of calling yourself God, etc. First line had good swag, too. Let them know who you are, fam.
Beginners vs IHH Legends. Vets decide & vote the winner
Bey/Kin Rapped around this Fresh Meat & cooked'em raw like Diodes dinner
IHH was dope, lol. Bacon flip was nice, haven't personally seen the Diode current event thread yet. Strong wording. Used Bacon/Bey kin vs. Deon in Bad Blood II 2nd round, but your flip was fresh (no pun intended).
Beyond & I formed a phalanx. Impregnable styled rhymes
Netcees Read Coats Formation... & their murder in a single file line
Strong wording again. Like how everything works perfectly both ways. Not really a fan of read/red at this point in text's existence, but there was enough extra stuff going on here to look beyond it. lol @oats doe being salty. The line was what it was. It was meant to be worded that way because it's more concise and somewhat smoother/streamlined to the Netcees' style. It wasn't meant to be complex, etc. Whatever I want something to be, it will be it. In text, topical, swag & flow, etc. Doesn't matter, God tier everything.
If Muskets flare I'm never scared & charge with Bayonets
I've got a Gun Attachment, You're attached to Neigh's display of text
Pretty solid personal jab here. Don't need a link or explanation or anything. 99% of this site with a vast amount being topical heads like his old GM buddies dull boy, big baby (might as well be since he's on their steez as well), Manhattan, Darth Yoda, El Pancake (read big baby), etc are Neigh's dick. No surprise there. Dude is dope no doubt and has lots of friends here.
Stand in range, cannons aimed - fifty 40 pounders shift
Para Lies? ok, You weren't crushed & dull boy properly operated the forklift
I like the idea if the nameplay hasn't been done yet, but wouldn't it of been better if you said he was crushed? Kind of confused by this line, honestly. Maybe connect like dull boy crushed his heart or something? Or he had a crush on dull boy? Idk, just carrying on from the Neighbor/GM/weird troll/bodybuilder/alias/senseless multies/paragraph style/say outlandish things that make no sense because it's funny/cool/gay/goes against social norms circle jerk from the previous line.
I fucking hate Topicalists 99% of you are trolls & nerdy
My favorite Coat Tale is where you rode each others & Exited the Tourney
lol @ first line. Damn, homie. In the Open Mic section you were the man, homie. Fuck happened to you? Second line is pure Ether. Make ya soul burn slow. Ouch.
meh
Get Peaced before the first round when the hands be fired
got everyone laughing if you throw One like Bigg K versus Danny Myers
Haven't seen the battle, but seems like it'd be good.
Ironic 10 Guns Holstered if you try to attack & murder me
You got Para Medics, when they left with YOUR body strapped, to a gurney
Good idea if it hasn't been used. Don't like the second comma after strapped. Seems weird and out of place.
We run blocks, do dirt & buck shots at the meanest crews
You are all imposters faking that walk of life & wear those Adidas shoes
*Impostor, apparently. There was a red line under it so I Googled it and sure enough, it's spelled with an o at the end. I don't recall personally using the word recently if at all in writing, but if i would, I probably would of looked it up beforehand like all other words I'm not sure of. Either way, once I do it's in my memory banks forever. And that, boys and girls, is all today on your lesson about why Beyond is so good in text. It has nothing to do with trying or effort, but just natural gifts (cognition). Actually, now that I think about it I guess the 5 second act of Googling something to make sure it's legit could constitute effort. Oh well, either way this bar was pretty solid. Smooth. Similar to your bar before it, not too complex or anything. More of just a reference line.
Pistol whips'll slit ya throat then watch'em bleed & suffer
Vocal cord between these two cans like each hand tryna talk to each other
First line doesn't really make sense. How could pistol whipping someone slit their throat? Idk, mang. lol. Idk. Either replace pistol whip with slash, like, with a knife, or something? Or slit ya throat with something else? Like gunshot wound for instance? Just spit balling here... liked the cord between these two cans idea. Creative.
Overall pretty good verse here, some parts could of been better obviously, but these are throwaway lines apparently, so that's understandable. And now here's he part where I randomly insert some mindless rambling into my feedback to make it look much more in depth that it is. LOL @ "I give better feedback than anyone here." I'll give you the 'more' aspect of it because that's objective, although I personally don't know if that's true or not, so other people who give feedback might find that offensive. Idk. Either way, I'm sure most here have gone through phases where they've fed literally everything that's been dropped. So what, you're feeding more than anyone RIGHT NOW, in a month you may not feed anything or not even be texting anymore. Who cares. You're also apparently the mod of the forum, so makes sense for you to feed more than others. I'm sure we've all been there, too. But I digress. Sort of. Well, not really. Kind of. Okay. But nah, you don't give better feedback than anyone because giving BETTER or the BEST feedback IS entirely subjective. Maybe you just say some bullshit like I'm doing right now and make it seem like you're giving good feedback, but you're really not. Maybe you just talk shit and say they are wack, but go into detail about it without actually trying to tell them how to improve their writing. Maybe you just praise people's writing and give no insight as to how to improve their craft (I'm sure you do that with any Neigh/Pancake/GM/etc drop). Maybe you're just an egotistical faggot who would get slayed by 90% of battlers in a topical battle writing about taking it up the ass. I don't know, man. I don't know. Either way, this was all very pointless and has no bearing on anything. I just see things as I'm sure others do that make me thing someone is a faggot and sometimes I will write essays on why I feel that makes me think they are a faggot. Just for roflz, you know? Or something. Idk. Overall, though, this was a pretty solid diss/throwaway lines verse here, my main mans. Hope to see more from you in the future.
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