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Old 08-19-2014, 06:00 PM   #4
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Originally Posted by Soulstice View Post
In that instant..
The shimmering absinthe is missing - from her derelict decanter
She's a modern metaphysical romantic - with terroristic candor
& she's terrible with answers she found nestled in some stanzas
In some dirty book on a rainy day in Brooklyn, Maine
or Long Island, New York - it's all the same
this stood out to me as the most impressive portion from a technical/rhythm standpoint. excellent.
rainy day / Maine - cleverly done.

it is good throughout but it's hard to match such a strong beginning all the way through. that part made me want "more of that" tempo..

from a content perspective it's interesting and well-done how we seem to be brought in to this woman's thoughts/feelings (she), in general, but also in relation to you (I)... + very good descriptions and metaphors..

ha i think bitches would love the verse but you'd have to change the title for them to love it
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