Purple Puke - Seems like a decent start at something that could be a lot better if it wasn't just 10 lines long as I enjoyed what I was reading. There's a lot of room for a dope story to develop here, but with 10 lines and a concept like this (chess I guess) I'd like to see the end product to be longer. Idk if you didn't have time or something to put some real work in, but ye, what this looks to me is a decent start at something that could have turned out to be pretty dope. Enjoyed the closure quite a bit though, I just give up if my opponent choose to ridicule me like that. Fuck those people.
Piiz - Just like Purple Puke I feel like 10 lines doesn't give your verse enough justice. Seeing the time you posted this at it's probably due to time as well. The rhymescheme stood out and I think you could have had a decent verse if you had given yourself some more time to write.
Vote - Purple Puke for a more complete verse and overall feel for what was posted. Piiz wasn't too far behind imo as PP's verse didn't feel complete (even though it kind of was this is supposed to be the quarter finals). Hope to see more from the winner in the next round.
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