Siu Mi - Nice job here, as a whole there wasn't really anything I disliked
except for the dickers & chests line, there was just something about it
that I didn't like. Other than that nothing blew me away but nor did it
really disappoint. I will say tho sometimes it felt like you chose rhyming over
content, which did make it feel a little bit forced in some areas.
Seymour - I enjoyed the storytelling route you took, it pretty much had me hooked off
from the kick off, some good use of humor and nice imagery used. The whole top of her
class before blossoming into a nice piece of ass, was a little cliche, but still made
for a good read, nice job.
Vote - Seymour , both took very different approaches but in this instance i preferred
Seymours verse as a whole.
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