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Old 08-17-2014, 06:33 PM   #12
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Cool little story. You deserve props for the non-stop stream of rhymes that never felt forced and the accessibility of this piece. Very easy to read and get into the narrative while still displaying top line rhyming. Difficult to do. The story was fun if not derivative. It was interesting, though, and kept my attention throughout.

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