I had just started writing feed to the verse and you tell me you fixed formatting, reread verse and now starting feed ALL OVER AGAIN.
It actually does read a bit better this way. Pretty solid in all areas considering your rhyming hiatus, a mighty mistake as you're fighting what made us. Interesting train of thought and a really enjoyable rhyme scheme. Each line was intricate, and you switched it up well throughout. The ending especially stood out to me. You got on a role witht he rhyme scheme, it turned out really well.
Welcome aboard here. This is a pretty dope site with a lot of good writers. Good place to learn a lot and further develop.
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