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Old 08-15-2014, 02:31 AM   #10
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Baby Cakes: Your styles don't mesh ideally, so the back-and-forth cypher-style verse was a bit offputting. But there were some solid lines, nonetheless. The opening two couplets in particular were very good, as were the last two. The lisp line wasn't tightly executed enough. The middle eight as a whole was a bit weaker, but I liked the salute line a lot. The different styles kind of come together a bit more toward the end, and the rhyming was particularly impressive here.

Audi Boys: I take it this whole verse was written by Allen Knight. The pancreatitis line was the best of the battle, and the baby shower line had a lot of potential but the way you worded the end of that line dulled the hit. A few times you just went way too obvious and uncreative, particularly on generic lines like the Robin Williams and Tracy Morgan bars. The final two couplets were OK, and the opener was good. But the second couplet was the worst of the battle. Tightening up the wording and adding another level of creativity to the Robin Williams and Tracy Morgan lines could have won you this battle.

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