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Old 08-14-2014, 08:12 PM   #9
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Advanced Placement: It's not often that Aero attacks so personally. This was a very good verse. I liked the Popeye line a lot, but then that closer was awesome. Nothing missed, really, though the airplane mode line could have been worded better (or even turned into a nameplay, potentially).

Taking Hostages: The opener was a good concept that needed more concise wording. After that, it started to go downhill. The only redeeming line in the last 10 was the martyrdom concept, which could have been worded much better. The closer read like a Lil Wayne outtake.

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