Think this was cool. Not bad. Couldve been better. Gave AP 18.0/40, and the other team 17.9/40 So really close, but I'll expand on that.
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Originally Posted by Paradigm
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Try & pursue the title's suicidal esp since Roar had you in dire straits
I'm a great - You lost to a guy who named himself after noise a Lion makes
This is considered good? No lie, I think I was reading gambles verse first when this was posted and almost PMed paradigm that he had made a mistake. Worst bar. Actually 2nd to last. Gamble had a very off line.
Yea I still contact your wife, it's great until you accuse the slut
Ask Tyson, your wife needs privacy when texting a man she used to fuck
Favorite line, this is probably the only good feedback you'll get. Brace yourself.
I'll bruise Gam's shoulders & brake his hands, have reporters in place with cams
He'll be shameful when anchors cover his swollen arms like Popeye the Sailorman
Neighbor wouldve worded this pretty godly, and incorporated the word popeye. Maybe I'll see you in later rounds to show you how it's done.
You impressed Universal Execs? LOL Bitch what the FUCK are you on?!
If jaws dropped & they put their hands together it was to cover a yawn
Wack. You straight up necked this from my counterpart, @dull boy, and ill quote for you, a much better line.
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Debated as the rawest on pages. God of the Matrix.
If your jaw droppers are sick... it's 'cause yawning's contagious.
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It's funny that your only good original punchline wasn't good nor original as the original good punchline. of course i'm hassling you, you read this from a text head and it stayed in your subconscious. Shame on you, text battler.
Delusional, claim your sex counts high & you stay with a different bitch
Lost count at 16 but couldn't count on one to spend Thanksgiving with
Personal. Not bad, couldve been done better. Felt cramped. Couldve been worded better for the GOAT.
It'd be Rocky theme, I'd do prison just for you showing up & won't cop a plea
Shiiit I'd willingly take the years from your appearance like a fucking oxy cream
Idk what para talking about, "perfect wording" WAs decent. Short bar, almost an ok punchline. Stuff like this isn't even that clever. Just a tiny little jab.
My stock's supreme so if I feel like hopping on a jet, I gave my paper
Your broke ass you only goes into airplane mode trying to save on data
Gave my paper? That doesn't make sense, it's like you paid your dues. You just made it up. Text heads always make things up. Decent. You're not bad for a human.
Blanco its a FACT your wife (slut) dresses you, this a personal bar
Last time you put your foot down & selected gear was to reverse in her car
Decent. Weird wording.
~ It's Aero
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Not bad, thought dominate would show and make this a fun read. But if you battlers want to get out into the further rounds you're going to have to step it up. I'll gladly give you a win so your ego isnt hurt, but you have to try. Sort of like when your dad lets you beat him in wrestling or at basketball when you're young, he'll let ya, but you're going to have to go full force. Only then will you learn. 18.0/40
Also, don't do bars like this, you sound like Drake.
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Bet both were in a frenzy to write. Trying to rush to win but we saw the ploy.
So for the record......we came to show we're taking AP's throne: LeSean Mccoy.
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It sounds like a bad joke a comedian told. I know you guys can do better. You guys have the potential and capability. Of course most of this post is harsh because I'm in a bad mood, but you guys couldve taken this because aero delivered with a lot of sub par lines. I'm going with AP with a slightly better verse, Gamble didnt seem as good as his usual self, and blanco couldnt hold the team up, as he needed some help as well. AP
aero wanted me to break down your verse so I will. I already said the Mccoy line was lane, those set ups are mediocre and lack contrast. The first line was decent, the next two couplets were complete misses in my book. Airhead was very good and refreshing! Martyr-dom was kinda lame, dysfunction? Idk, seemed eh. Airplane and simple was wow, idk not very connective there. Seemed weak. But I thoroughly enjoyed the 357 line. Good stuff, enjoyable.