[dead man]

lol oats steady dropping those futurist posts.

anyway i liked this for its brevity. i think you work best in short, succinct bursts of inspiration. unfortunately it doesnt seem like they're coming along often. fortunately, you're still motivated to read and comment on many other pieces and for that i thank you.

Love lost in the sheets that a tyrant defends,
Tossing change - hate myself - buying a friend.
Love found on the streets in the smile of a guest’s
thin, cracked lips.

the - hate myself - reads like an internal thought in the midst of action. I'm re-reading old stephen king books atm and he does this quite often although he uses italics to communicate internal stream of consciousness thoughts and the like.

Estranged. Hugged it out and you found I was thinner.
Wrote you a letter but the message was false:
My pencil is precious. Alchemist. Turns lead into gold.

second line was my favorite out of the verse. third was second. first was third. needless to say, this section was a central hub of interest for me. i think we share that urge to drop a line of pure self-indulgence every now and then. maybe its just our hiphop roots or maybe its something more primal.

great work as always homie. hope to see a newer submission sooner than later.


thanks



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