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Old 08-14-2014, 02:05 AM   #12
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This was okay. It was lively and it had a decent flow. Albeit, the content was all over the place, and I believe it can be presented in a more eye catching manner. The writing can be compared to a newly sprouting flower. It still hasn't fully gone through all its stages of maturation. It still needs to be nurtured, so it will blossom and live up to its inherent brilliance. Continue nurturing your writing.
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