[UnbornBuddha]

This was a quaint piece. The scheme of things seemed a bit all over the place. It would be easier on the mind's eye if you lined up the bars, as they call it, in more close proximity to each other. This of course entails one to forget the besetting of every idea in one's mind, and instead formulate a more strict disciplined way of conjuring up the jousting of one's lexicon. This of course has a requisite of polishing more closely the lines that sprung from one's stream of consciousness. If this isn't all too clear, in simple words make sure everything has a form to it. This tangibility can still retain the free spiritedness you love to write in, and encompass. In fact one could say that the best of both worlds embodies the void in the materialized aspect of one's art. Creativity is essentially formless, an abstract sketch of inspiration that trickles from above making one pursue an ever ensuing search for perfection.
The medium for hip hop scripters is of course the lyrics. Give more shape to your creativity, but in shaping it don't lose the essence of this creativity.
Thank you.