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obsessed
Join Date: Nov 2013
Location: fucka idiyote
Posts: 5,709
Battle Record: Faggot-1
Accomplishments
- can recite entirety of shrek 2
Champed
- tangoed with spider man behind scenes in spider-man 2
- was candidate for gerber baby 3x
- smush parker like bb comment on instagram saying "u fucka suck idiyote"
- smush beer on head and didn't cry
- parallel parked in between 2 ferrari's in tonky truck once
- when saying pledge of allegiance i said "i don't" lmao deadass bb satan
- won tshirt from taco bell saying "taco cat" is the same backwards for filling out 500 surveys in a
- neighbor house caught on fire i call FIRE department and saved lives, was in newspaper
- set neighbor house on fire lmao
- fuck neighbor husband and wife
- first fish caught resembled david ortiz
- colin kaepernick
- related to genghis khan
- elected assistant to the vice president assistant to the president for regional chess club
- never lost game of hide and seek
Rep Power: 8599682
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Fun read. The first read had a consistency at a pretty good rate with less faults. Wording was good enough, the hits were jabs all throughout. Nothing really strong. The chris bosh line was probably the only line that was generically placed, decent enough. Everything else was of relevance/tied into the community. Uncle tom and dirt person were my favorites. The former having a bit of humor/satire entailed into it, honestly made it the best bar written in those 16. The latter just being a slight play on words, and a decent opener. I liked this verse, everything was consistent. Nothing really sucked, and nothing was over the top amazing.
The latter verse was ok. The opener immediately set the tone, and I had no idea what it was about. That's ok, not to say it didnt land in some universe, but to me it made little sense. And if it's going by that deons fat then its pretty lackluster imo. I dont get consuela? That seems like a stretch, con swella? I don't know what the hell that means his penis, the abrasions from his bruises from when you beat him up? Depending on the context of the finish prefix of the bar it seems that its the former option, which is pretty weird? I don't get it. Pitiful that gamble didnt say nothing about the line about him, which i thought was the second best line in this verse. Gamble's garbage and shouldnt vote on anything. Little bitch. The disabled line was way too forward and yo mama joke-ish. The deon fat/food ones are lame.
This kind of works to swerves advantage, because no1 knows/cares who deon is, and if they do make a bar about him, it'll miss cause nobody cares/knows who deon is. So the brunt of the damage would have to aim towards swerve, which this has nothing of, really. And ironically the very next bar in this couplet is one dissing swerve, and possibly LOTB and by far the best in this verse. It had relevant coupling along with some humor, and it dissed swerve, instead of deon, some guy who supposedly always no shows, so why diss him? The former clearly takes this. (conswervation)
This battle was sort of short. But the winner is pretty obvious after a second round and analysis. GJ fun read.
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Originally Posted by greed
If mentioned in a discussion its who'd still use wordy lines and act all dope
Then again hes had this schtick so long he like bb da bb da bb thats all folks
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Last edited by big baby; 08-14-2014 at 08:54 PM.
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