Camp Bell: Your strong point is swag-and-flow writing. Yet here, you have a very clever punchline but don't rhyme.
Vividlyvague: It's good to know that even your 1-2 punchlines are way too wordy. You tried to do too much here, and your lack of cadence meant you didn't really take advantage of Camp Bell's busted rhyme.
Vote: Camp Bell
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