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Old 08-12-2014, 06:17 PM   #5
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Originally Posted by pharaohsarmy52 View Post
And I don't want to fuck wit your story...this is just a suggestion...but perhaps instead of "the passenger", what if you said something shocking and graphic like "he pushed my body out the moving car"?. Lol. I think it would continue the theme of your casually worded violence. (hope i interpreted it right; as you are the passenger).


good lookin on the feedback, I appreciate it.. but yea, the only reason I worded it as he pushed the "passenger" instead of "me" iS because after the space it was switching from the passengers perspective to the drivers
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