This battle is very close. You both had slight errors, the second verse had a few bars that just didn't rhyme at all period. The first verse was too short and didn't feel as complete as it should have. Both had strong writing points as well including both competitors progression. I enjoyed both reads. I preferred the story of second verse more, but the overall writing in the first IMO was just a tad better, but not by a lot. I think if it were much longer it would have been a no brainer vote for me. But as it stands the feeling of reading a incomplete verse that left me desiring more is tough to vote for.
Voting Second verse
__________________
An Acid Rapper, A large while Flaccid Bastard.
|