Seymour Butts - The first verse fluent and dope as fuck. I particularly enjoyed how the names seem natural and not just names that's obvious were chosen/created to make it rhyme. It was fresh throughout. Second verse keeps the story going and everything is going well, no fillers or excess shit, straight to the point and keeping a natural progression to the story at hand. Same thing can be said about the third verse, you definitely got a unique story going as well.
Fourth verse, your imagery and describing what's going on is fluent as fuck. It's easy to understand what's going on, and with just a few lines you manage to describe a battle from beginning to end without it looking forced while keeping a consistent flow, interesting and engaging lines and still following the natural progression of what's going on. That shows skill.
The last verse along with the closure were dope as well. I enjoyed the story from start to finish, and you used a lot of imagery following the theme of a mythical war saga to fit to the topic given. Loved the shit out of it. Well done.
Peter McPuffington - Dope intro, definitely got me interested in what's to come. Not sure what I feel about the ''one,two, three''-section.
Enjoyed the storm/lightning thing when you got Nikola Tesla as a theme for your piece. Don't really got much to add for what you wrote other than I enjoyed the verse as a whole, the concept was cool and I like how you portrayed Nikola Tesla and bringing some story into this shit along with names like Thomas Edison etc. And peoples intentions for using his creations reminds me about Oppenheimer in a lot of ways and describes the concept you're getting into well, the usefulness of inventions for good deeds will be used for evil if possible. You nail the topic here. Also got to love how he was ''open source'', wanting to and even inviting everyone to expand and improve his ideas. Cool shit.
Vote - Seymour Butts. Although I enjoyed McPuffington's verse quite a bit I still felt it kind of lacked the same depth and storytelling which Seymour Butts covered well. The story S.B. told was unique, flowed really well and was overall really well crafted. McPuffington's verse was dope as well, but it didn't outdo his opponent this time around. Dope battle.
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