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gaseous snake: There were some really great quotes to be pulled from this dense verse. It certainly was an impressive display on the level that this genre of writing allows. You handled a lot of aspects of the modern culture, and you did so with deftness but without subtlety. It almost felt like the melding of the 10-line verses by Mike Wrecka and Split in their recent Battle Arena match. There were times that you got a little too preachy, but mostly the issue here was that you slipped into loquaciousness. Some of these segments were serious mouthfuls when the wording easily could have been tightened. The complexity and deftness of the rhymes helped. But while none of the thought here was original in the grand scheme, the way you wove these cogent points together was impressive. You moved the verse very fluidly to your conclusion and made a very real statement about the difference between intelligence and resourcefulness. I liked this verse, and with some paring down, it could have been great.

wolfdick: Basically, you rhymed a lot. Those rhymes didn't always mean anything. Sometimes they did. Sometimes you had very nice points, particularly off the "mood" rhyme in the middle. But the rhymes were easy, and you put them ahead of any real content or approach on the topic. The little red letters gimmick was silly because any verse long enough could have spelled it out like that. Had you written a 16-line verse with those letter as the opening letters to each line, I would have been more impressed. But the verse didn't tie into that context anyway. I liked bits of it, but it felt like a free-writing exercise after you saw gaseous snake's very good verse and decided against putting in enough effort to beat it.

Vote: gaseous snake