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Originally Posted by uh-oh

things to note, i am terrible, like in a grammar/sentence structure type way since i didnt pay attention in english probably ever before i dropped out of school. but i am an idiot savant who builds an entire world in my head daily while on autopilot

but word i could use feedback on my AFOREMENTIONED terrible grammar and knowledge of, well, writing in essence.

I wouldn't worry too much about it, people will probably help you out enough in here and if you should ever be close to publishing anything spend some extra money for an editor if you should choose to self publish (through a book publisher they'll most likely give you one as part of the deal). Even a bunch of seasoned up and coming writers with great grammar have regret not doing this for their first book, in other words you only need enough knowledge about grammar to make your story comprehensible when it comes down to it as it'll be corrected anyways. So the main focus should be to just make your story entertaining and engaging towards the reader and polish up the rest as you improve in this style of writing.