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Old 08-07-2014, 12:28 AM   #2
UnbornBuddha
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Hello my friend,
My reaction?
Well, I do not take any of what you have said as harsh, but rather with hefty consideration. For what you have provided is indeed good feedback, so it is indeed necessary for me to give it a listen to. Hopefully, rectifying with practice the weaknesses.
I also see the shortcomings in what I choose to start my lines with. I do write spontaneously, almost as in free writing, and then come back and edit. Your assessment of the more of the wind type is correct. What thing I do disagree with is keeping a consistent concrete rhyme scheme at all times, that is a perfectionist attribute that I'm not too ardent to apply. I do have some perfectionist in me, but I'm not obsessive either. But I wholeheartedly agree that my rhyme schemes can definitely be improved on. Any advice would be highly appreciated to address the proposed chaos.
As for the stumbling of vocabulary I do not know if I understand what you are trying to convey. Any clarification would be most insightful. Most of the times when I write I use words/ terminology that are in my vocabulary already.
And from whence I came from is not from another forum. Especially not one that consists of like minded Canibus followers/ fanbase. To tell you the truth I do not listen much to him. I usually wrote with any other enthusiastic fellows that were willing to share and partake that space with me.
Fauhst as in Goethe's. And yes weep his light means the pouring/ leaking out of his essence, what made the boy him.
Thank you very much for giving me many fine points in which I can begin to work on.

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