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Eŋg · 08-05-2014, 04:53 PM

i think i've come to the realization that you've gradually become one of my top 3 guys to read. i've rubbed shoulders with many talented writers but, due to my own flaws, few inspire me. you're one of those dudes whose ability can.

It’s often vile. look within and your reflection’ll bruise

tryin to hide my mind from the inevitable elephant
that my intellectual level is nothing special or relevant

and then you have humble, painfully self-aware lines like these which are more than refreshing to read.

This for the folks who grow their soul and keep their egos illiterate

i'm beginning to understand this. dope. this improved as it moved along - you warmed up, thought the aggressive stance you adopt for a few lines came a bit out of left-field. the wording was, as is usual, very clean. i agree with Certain about the best section. one thing i would say, and it's less criticism than it is revealing preference, is the way you string together and extend rhymes can, on occasion, create a sort of infantile bop-your-head metronome. the rhyming is still very good, and technically impressive, but i appreciate (and think you could benefit from) some slightly more unorthodox or experimental methods in attempts to diversify. just a thought.

thanks for sharing this.

08-05-2014, 04:53 PM	#13
Eŋg rhyme capsule. Join Date: Sep 2018 Posts: 2,150 Rep Power: 0	i think i've come to the realization that you've gradually become one of my top 3 guys to read. i've rubbed shoulders with many talented writers but, due to my own flaws, few inspire me. you're one of those dudes whose ability can. It’s often vile. look within and your reflection’ll bruise tryin to hide my mind from the inevitable elephant that my intellectual level is nothing special or relevant and then you have humble, painfully self-aware lines like these which are more than refreshing to read. This for the folks who grow their soul and keep their egos illiterate i'm beginning to understand this. dope. this improved as it moved along - you warmed up, thought the aggressive stance you adopt for a few lines came a bit out of left-field. the wording was, as is usual, very clean. i agree with Certain about the best section. one thing i would say, and it's less criticism than it is revealing preference, is the way you string together and extend rhymes can, on occasion, create a sort of infantile bop-your-head metronome. the rhyming is still very good, and technically impressive, but i appreciate (and think you could benefit from) some slightly more unorthodox or experimental methods in attempts to diversify. just a thought. thanks for sharing this.