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Zen · 08-02-2014, 12:36 PM

Ooooh, I think I know who you is.

For the post I'd say this was worded perfect except for the paints the West in red line. I felt like that rhyme came a little too soon and threw off the pacing a bit. This was cool though.

08-02-2014, 12:36 PM	#2
Zen Arm the Homeless Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,102 Battle Record: 22-24 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 35079722	Ooooh, I think I know who you is. For the post I'd say this was worded perfect except for the paints the West in red line. I felt like that rhyme came a little too soon and threw off the pacing a bit. This was cool though.