Keep doing your thing, you're getting better with each piece you write, some of the wording in this was a little awkward but with some polishing you could be very good...what's with the capital letters all the time tho? It isn't overly important but it does get a little annoying. It felt sometimes you used 'big' words for the sake of using them when something more simple would have sufficed...this was cool tho, keep writing and you'll keep getting better.
I'm gonna have to drop something soon to remind NC how The Fox do...it's been too long.
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