This was okay. The flow was hard to find, although you did apply that pause and go, pause and go kind of flow quite efficiently. It felt like it lacked something, and that something is perhaps this writings and insignia of you. I've read others pieces of you, and though you apply different styles, there is still a flavor, a spice that makes this writings uniquely yours. And though this are your thoughts, the way you exemplified this work seems as if you weren't completely into the work. Meaning you didn't put your whole heart into this piece. Also you also did end quite suddenly, as if there was words still lodged in your throat that you decided was best left unsaid.
Keep writing, I enjoy your presence, and your musings.
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