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Old 07-30-2014, 08:57 PM   #9
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Originally Posted by Kin View Post
diggin' this beat...
1st verse Feelin' the style man...laid back...some parts seem like they could use more energy/emotion

hook- not really feelin' it man...gotta be real haha

2nd verse-bad memories tattoo line was nice, better emotion in this verse...Hollow as the bottles I smash...ok this verse was a lil' nicer to me

wishin' u did somethin' different with the hook...makin' me distracted haha

oh ok thought u were comin' in wit' a 3rd verse... So Why no doubles behind your verse?? think that would make the overall feel a lil' stronger

flow is ok needs a lil' work in parts but overall as a track this was solid....besides the hook

Feel this beat was a lil' too slow tempo for what would fit your rhyme schemes better also

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Thanks for all the advice man, I've kind of grown accustomed to writing two verses a track, I feel like I tire out the subject if I drag it on too long. I'll try some doubles, I've heard that from people before but I can never mix it right to where it doesn't sound bad. This was kinda a fastly made hook but I can't say I would have changed it, I didn't really see any other way it could go but I'll try to expand more. Thanks for the feedback again fam it means a lot
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