Camp Bell: I liked the Kentucky opener a lot, as it was kept subtle enough that it worked even if someone missed the connections. The fast food line also was good, and the Saturn line could have worked had "rings" rhymed with "space." But your verse never connected. This is a swag-and-flow battle, so it really shouldn't feel like couplets strung together. You never had real swagger here and never picked up momentum.
Alvin Karpis: This is a huge step up from last round. Your punchlines are sharp, and you kept the rhymes coming in droves. It also had a smoother cadence than last round. I was impressed here. Almost every line had something worth noticing. If anything, you could probably tone down the creativity in favor of a little more swagger. This verse was on the level required if you want to compete with Neighbor (or is this the championship now?).
Vote: Alvin Karpis
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