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Old 07-28-2014, 11:59 PM   #8
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It might have just been me but I felt like you were forcing a lot of the rhymes, I felt like some spots would've been better if you hadn't done that. It was still a good read though and you still had a dope flow fam. My favorite part was the first 10-12 lines. Keep writing though bro
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