Interesting battle here. Zenland, I liked your direction here. Did a good job with really portraying your characters thoughts & feelings through a letter. I wasn't too impressed with the rhyme scheme, it seemed a bit choppy & there were times where you seemed to throw words together to keep the flow going which sacrificed somewhat some potential solid imagery/details. Nonetheless, it was a solid piece. c.d.m., you had the better mechanics in this match, good approach to the topic, a more literal take, but the imagery & details were pretty good. Scheme was predictable. I wouldn't say this is one of your better drops compared to your last two. It's missing that "it" factor that you usually bring.
MVGT: Zenland.
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