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Old 07-27-2014, 10:24 AM   #11
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Originally Posted by big baby View Post
May I?

A lot of things to pinpoint. By rhyming, the assonance doesn't make it seem you have a grasp in words. I agree with p, its just a lot of words were input in the wrong spot it seemed. And it seemed lazy. If a more skilled writer were to do this it would be done better, even with the same syllabic count. It just lacks substance and the words in-between words don't support the scheme. Adjective and verbs maximize this and you tend to either cutthroat it or let it go. It seems lackluster. Idk. Not very good.
hello bb da bb.

I have questions about your feedback and comments sir.

1. Thank you for your feedback and taking the time to write and read.

2. Do you think what I wrote means something? or is it just nonsense?

3. Is it possible that I actually have a mastery of words and am thus able to link the complex of concepts into a nonstop abstract rhyming pattern to help make them simpler...yet still mysterious as I said I would in the opening statement?

4. is it possible that you, like dan, do not like the message of what I am saying, so you find fault in it?

5. who was stronger, Vegeta or Goku?
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The cerebral assassin, the molder of minds, the Omni potent being. Time transcending traveler, wisdom incarnate. Veritas needs no intro but I guess I have to. He’s not know in the battling world but who doesn’t know veritas? The guy us always original and if you pay attention to his bars, dude brings the heat.. The gawd.
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