This was pretty cool man, a ton of action and active language to get the brain working. Organizationally, it reminded me of Immortal Technique's flow when he gets 'scientific' if you will, but he is less inclined to go for a ubiquitous freewrite and more likely to concentrate on the conceptual impact of every single bar. You pay attention to the cadence only enough so that it keeps the reader's interest - but as a result you don't really leave a lasting flavor in our mouths. I liken it to reading through a National Geographic magazine. It has to be a really good article for me for to involuntarily remember and retain the information I read or the pictures I looked at. I think you should work more on impacting the reader with something and not basing it on trying to impress upon us the sheer bulk of your lexicon.
Bionic feet will be the future's prosthetic means to move about in the poetic end times.
^This line stood out to me, no pun intended. I liked the premise of the idea. Robots are takin' over.
I'm enjoying your presence in this section and it only adds to the richness of the Netcees OM catalogue. Keep doing your thing.
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