Seemed directionless. Your writing deals a lot with how you see others & how they see you. This was that in its very barebones state which is hard to convey elegantly, and (no offense) you didn't. Sounded almost like a Childish Gambino verse if he was coming down from a lot of shrooms. I guess I liked the ember imagery.
Keep keyin.
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