Inno - there are some wording issues and as far as the flow, I'm not loving it. The schemes seem a bit off...wording issues - "I proceed to hatch plans to conceive plots to create"... what your saying is you hatch plans you think of while creating?? Has to be a easier way to word your point across. Rhymes scheme issues - mundane, contain, brain....pay attention to syllable count in end of lines for flow. As for the piece it self, I rather love it, meaning the concept. You child being your words, and you giving it life while writing for us. Dope concept my man, and actually the wording issue I listed seems more like inuendo for the underlying concept then anything. All in all, I enjoyed your verse, I did however, not enjoy so many missing comas or some of your rhyme schemes. But as I said, overal it was enjoyable.
Rown - easier read then Inno, decent flow but a bit simple, fast paced story and I would imagine anyone who read, gave it full attention due to the pace. Charachter build up was there, imagery was there, flow was there. Overal very solid drop and read.
Vote - to me, it boils down to this, a story that had amazing pace and good execution. Verse, really a in depth look at the writer Inno with not so great mechanics, but solid execution on getting the point across. Well I enjoyed both, I more then likely will side with "the idea" over a story line, because I've read many stories over the years. And well Pat's was rather new to me, I didn't much like the ending. The father seemed like he loved his son very, very much in the character build up in first stanza, then kills himself in the last stanza for really no good reason. So with all this said... vote - Innovater in a close, but not that close bout...IMO
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