Idk if I've commented on your stuff before, if your Zenland I have I think...but yeah whatevers.This was tight from top to bottom...you have some great emotion in this and for the majority I thought your word usage was pretty crisp, seems like your thoughts come with ease and when pennin' them down shit turned out effortless without the use off overly complex content which I liked...was a real easy read, flow was straight man...dope verse.
Watched my life slip away without knowing I did it.
Let pride get in the away of my emotional commitments.
Now I'm left with a wine tip in the tray, soda and bourbon for dinner.
Sigh, and cut the chase. Up the dosage to feel it.
^^Nice.
I pushed her away. Asked only for distance.
"Have it your way."
Her tone was different.
^^Been there.
Stay upwards.
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