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Certain · 07-24-2014, 01:47 AM

murda sho: The opener is line of the round from what I've read so far. That was terrific, a mix of clever and personal while also being worded well. Other than that, you didn't have anything particularly great. Defiant's punches line was good enough to be a second hit. The Kin line was worded for minimum impact, and the Bacardi (why can't people spell that correctly?) and Boy Meets World lines were wordplay stretches.

Alvin Karpis: This easily is the worst verse I've seen from you. The Mentos line was somewhere between clever and stretched. The THOT and crowd lines were pretty good as fillers, but the back half of the verse really didn't do it for me. John Daly has wordplay potential, but you didn't set it up well at all. And Jon Taffer was a little too directly obvious. Moreover, there was nothing personal about this verse (be it direct disses or nameplays) after the opener.

Vote: murda sho

07-24-2014, 01:47 AM	#10
Certain Mad fucking dangerous. Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 12,066 Battle Record: 40-19 Champed - AOWL Season 3 - Art of Writing League (2x) Rep Power: 85899406	murda sho: The opener is line of the round from what I've read so far. That was terrific, a mix of clever and personal while also being worded well. Other than that, you didn't have anything particularly great. Defiant's punches line was good enough to be a second hit. The Kin line was worded for minimum impact, and the Bacardi (why can't people spell that correctly?) and Boy Meets World lines were wordplay stretches. Alvin Karpis: This easily is the worst verse I've seen from you. The Mentos line was somewhere between clever and stretched. The THOT and crowd lines were pretty good as fillers, but the back half of the verse really didn't do it for me. John Daly has wordplay potential, but you didn't set it up well at all. And Jon Taffer was a little too directly obvious. Moreover, there was nothing personal about this verse (be it direct disses or nameplays) after the opener. Vote: murda sho __________________ I'm just swinging swords strictly based on keyboards, unbalanced like elephants and ants on seesaws.