[big baby]

Hated the content. Seemed force. Repetitive usage of repeating vowels was upsetting because it made the content suffer. Though you may be happy with it now, in two months (if you keep up a rapid pace of writing) it'll seem weak. Everything I've ever written has sucked to me the very next day. Except for about 5 things. IF you encounter this, you'll be proud. The succint part, was just, off to me. Seemed a bit too forced, though it made sense, and you seem to strain your actual thoughts emphasis, rather than enforcing it through a brushstroke. You sort of just splattered the canvass with paint. And you aren't picasso. You're a 9th grade art student. Continue writing and sending me things so I can take you across this path so you can obliterate pancake and certain. You're close.