This guy is a Loser, you’ll all be seein it soon
If he’s the Lyfe of the Party, I’m that guy in the corner OD’in on shrooms
Ya girl loves my Sex game, she sings when I’m fillin her mate
She says Lyfe’s too Short. & getting in bed w/ you is a Gamble she’s not willing to take
Dog, how do you Manage? Your style is wack it’s undeniably clear
It’s just another Day @ the Office. Cuz you’ve had nothing but Deadlines ya entire Career
- Life of the Party was nice, Life's to Short was FIRE & I've seen a lot of deadline concepts but this one was slick, IMO.
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I'm telling you, this bitch might be a dike. All girly shit this kike always writes
& Once i strike w/ a knife? Tick'll fight his way out.. Well, of the tickle fight for his life.
Your best attempt. Rest had wording/execution issues.
NON-Quotes:
Tic,
Double fisting had potential but the execution was stale. I think you could have did more w/ that and got creative w/ it. Life in the Street was pretty much the same, not to mention, I've seen people use that exact execution on people like "Wordz AhGod." in a "Word on the Street" type concept. Feel me?
Gamble,
Opener really didn't make much sense to me and came off as a statement, rather then a PUN. Expect Tac u lure was weird for me. Dig the creativity but you tried to cram way too much shit in that bar which killed any type of impact the PUN could have had & your wording/execution of it was all over the place. Same w/ Secret Tic bar. Felt like it was awkward and stretched. The closer had potential but you went the basic route with a played concept that could have been flipped A LOT better.
Anyways, enough explaining...
v/Tic
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