[Adonis]

Jah - "Definitely smart"???? I mean really there are 150 better words then definitely my daughter could come up with that would make more sense here. Beyond that this verse was, actually in my mind rather dope. The ending being the highlight obviously, the route of all evil can be open to interpretation in your context, saying women or relationships or just bitches feeling sorry cuz they alone. Either way, it's a plus that you wrote something that made me ponder beyond your words, that is rare, and there you succeeded. Flow was on point through out, story was cool although you spent too many bars on the opening "she left me *tears*" and not enough on us getting to know her or how strong this relationship obviously was because of the outcome. So, the emotional factor was not there in a sense, but again, I come back to the picture perfect ending, this corrected a lot of things for you, rather overshadowed them.

Cert - Opening stanza makes me feel like you were "Theman080" at PR, PM if yes or just tell me whom you were for the 58th time. "But was she ever here or a lie?" Didn't like this sentence. Other then that small hindrance, this was very much a crisp read, extremely fluid and gave a strong emotional connection to a character who is simply overwhelmed and over life. The voice you drew out for me as a reader was very somber. The contrasting concepts helped flesh out the base story and then you capped it all off with pretty much a (older school) Vulgaresque or SacriFICE open to interpretation and take it as you may type closer. Again, for me this is awesome because I'm not being force fed and I draw what I can from what's been given. This verse was about life and the ups and downs, the classic american struggle of bobbling wealth or lack there of and sustaining a relationship. In the end you spelled it all out, and simply said the road is a bumpy one. There were individual line concepts that I won't touch on much, but know they were appreciated and showed a well thought out verse instead of the A-typical Certain who seems to be focused on writing rather then running these rug rats in a league at the highest level. I'm rambling again, one example is the water and asphyxiation and constant battle of trying to keep afloat. I enjoy long concepts as such, again, I took it as life in general, but I can see how some may take this as a relationship piece, although I prefer not to because that would make it more gay


Voting Certain

Both pieces I enjoyed, but the polish in one out shined the overall effect of a stellar closer. Cert simply overpowered his counterpart.