Certain: I started copy and pasting the lines in this that stood out the most, but I had to delete them because there were too many. Seriously. The entire opening stanza could've been quoted, especially the last two lines. The pushing grieving aside, push to the needles lines are a few more examples. I really couldn't find anything wrong with this, and I tried real hard to find something wrong with it. To put it simply, this was just good writing.
King Ra: I liked the ending. It made it a literal route which I thought was cool. This was actually a good piece, but it had to be nearly perfect to beat out Certain this week, and I don't think it was if I had to be honest. There were a few instances where poor wording ruined this for me. "I'm stupid & not definitely smart" line really sticks out as an example of that. Besides the few problems with wording this was a good verse, but I don't think it was enough to match what Certain brought this week.
V/Certain
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