Overall good drop. I saw a couple lines that I didn't enjoy like the lemon line and the few lines that followed of that. Also a few wording issues like in the first line I would've said scar some children instead of adding in the word couple since it kinda fucks up the multi there. But the lines towards the end were enjoyable. They flowed of the tongue easily as I read them and that's always nice. And I'd recommend to post feed on other people's verses if you expect to get feed on your piece honestly but keep droppin man.
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