kin: Good flow, the flow is the strongpoint, the alliteration was good with the com con, but towards the end, with the fast flow rhyming with repetitive, it fell off for me cus that rhyme scheme is so easy to rap fast and is repetitive lol, overall it was good. I thought it sounded cheesy when you and Learic did the repeat of ur last lines, it killed the flow for me.
Breez: i didn't like his and didn't pay enough attention to critique
Learic: his delivery was very good, sounded like blueprint, although his lyrics were kinda simple, they had the most meaning. i think Learic did slightly better than you, although your flow, vocab, & alliteration were better. Just cus his delivery, his meaning kinda set the tone for the song, although it seams like he wrote his after yours, having knowledge of what urs was,
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Last edited by Mitch; 07-20-2014 at 12:37 PM.
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