[Certain]

drippy eye the sinusitis. here to synthesize a virus
psyche liquified at dinnertime we sit around the cyprus
minimize the window looking dignified, designer
and distinctive, middle-class, middle-child, via vagina
lemongrass, smoke your epitaph its time to decease
recline, release. sometimes it feels like being tied to a leash
21st century where rhymes are typist elite
and 20 bucks a month buys anyone a license to preach
still as muddy waters, feeling hype as a beast
yeah it might have been real. but maybe i've been asleep
indecisive delete. rewrite and polish and prime

You write so often about this little niche community we have. It's an interesting pattern to mix in with your real-world philosophying, but it's not often that you're as head-on as you are here. The parts that stood out here were the "middle-class, middle-child" and "20 bucks a month" and "yeah it might have bene real" lines. There's a lot to be said for what we're doing at these keyboards, and you don't seem as eager to judge the relevance as to study the patterns. I find it refreshing that you don't take a stand and have a driving thesis, not that you were going to let DexLabb influence you too much.

nature-freak in leather loafers. metropolitan mindset
jenga topple refinement easily like comets and climate
the only option is climb when there's a mountain ahead
crawling out to the ledge. veins of riverbeds, firry her flesh
complexion like a crescent-moon wolves howl at instead
slanting couplets with a signature scent to follow in jest
i keep sriracha on my tacos and a lock on your neck.

This little diversion into a werewolf girlfriend concept was interesting. I liked the metaphor of this uncontrolable beast that must be caged not being the writer himself but being the love of the writer's life. Female werewolves are so rare in literature because the werewolf was created to describe masculine urges. The Sriracha tacos line (by the way, quit bastardizing with your food fusion bullshit and put some Cholula on those tacos) was interesting and I think was a comment on trendiness and Internet culture. This one humor food blogger calls Sriracha "Internet paste" and probably is dead-on about that.

i'm from where you never wanna be best. you're mocked for respect
we stare at heaven everyday but settle for less
darling, you're a mess. let's get you out of that dress
step out for a second. powder your nose. your powder is best
from ottoman to desk i'm Dr. common as dirt
give me shirts made of cotton and an office to work
there's honor in tradition and a calm in the current
any job done with dignity is totally worth it.
everybody's lovable regardless of their purchases
consider being anything at all. you're always perfect.

I didn't care as much for this closer. It was about as happy and satisfied as I've ever seen you write, so that was a nice change of pace. But it wasn't as creative or pointed as the first two-thirds of the verse. The first two lines were good. But the transition to "darling" was a bit off and seemed to shift the piece in a more awkward way than the werewolf bridge. And the wording on the "any job done with dignity is totally worth it" line was sloppy. "Totally" doesn't fit the tone, even ironically.

I do think sometimes that your individual pieces could stick with images and concepts a little longer. While I like the removed and abstract observe thing you have going on, I wish that you focused that. But as a whole, everything you write is worth reading. There are always gems. This wasn't as quotable as some of your best work, but it was very good.