[DexLabb]

idk man, lately.. and this is from a topical perspective. there is no clear underlying thesis to your work. i mean, a thesis should be reverberating in the mind of the reader because it is such a wild and unexpected idea.. and i feel like this you are lacking lately due to a certain ambiguity. i would love to read a verse that challenges my core beliefs...

i get that you are injecting your lines with entertainment, and i'm glad to see that. but this creates the ambiguity if you aren't careful. i would suggest cementing your ideas by creating a solid storyline to back up the playful linguistics. i know these guys here won't exactly agree, but i could see you writing a book of hybrid poems. if James Franco can do it, im sure you can too