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Old 07-18-2014, 02:48 PM   #6
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Wow very dramatic. And I liked the last verse quite a bit. I've always been a fan in ending with riddles, that lead to contemplative introspection. What the being spoke as the so called mental math could have had more meaning. And no that wasn't a pun. This implies that yes I understood what you meant. But you executed it in a way where the paradox of interconnection and inevitable change failed to deliver a change on the reader himself, even if he refused the perspective. I don't know if I'm making it clear. But anyways the rest was most excellent.

By the way I like your final fantasy end of the world logo.
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