This reads like the last letter of a suicidal man who knows his going to hell. It had very strong images that invoked such connotations. There's also a hint of irrationality which fits quite nicely with the theme of it all. The reason why this is is because it displays the rushing of the stream of irrationality of the last thoughts filtering as one's final closing approaches. It had a cynicism to it that displayed the virulent, and pestilent emotions, and state of mind that leads one to depart into the abyss.
And you made this abyss come to life in a very unique way, although obviously influenced by Abrahamic beliefs of some type of redemptive "purgatory".
"Follow me into the abyss, where this nightmare is eternal, The blind stares, the cries layered.. as if Christ airs the inferno"
That line is brilliant, and entails an idea that has haunted many individuals destiny for eons it seems.
Well anyways, keep writing.
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