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Old 07-18-2014, 02:10 PM   #2
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This was very enjoyable. And I do enjoy you using botanical plants to illicit a certain reaction from the reader. You have very vivid imagery, as cliche as that statement probably is. Although it will be nice if you manipulated the verse to have a rising and a fall, to a climax. There seems to be no real climax that grapples the reader and throws them into the abyss of unknowing wondering the provenance of it all. I do believe your quite capable of doing so considering your talent, and imagination.
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